My improved story 2







When I opened the old cracked door of Room 14 I found myself in a horror show. Rats roamed the class like an Egyptian Emperor ''Duck!'' screamed Jensen to Jon ,suddenly Jon had a dramatic fall as he hit the hollow floor. 
Maybe if I close my eyes for a minute the class might calm down................... (No difference) The sun was  beaming through the window like a flamethrower. the teachers are slacking off as if today was Christmas, this is not how I imagined Christmas. The window has scratch marks made into the sentence less work more fun. Without warning a tickling feeling shot up my back I screamed to Anna ''Get it off Anna, oh please get it off!'' she yanked the poor critter right off my back and I let out a sigh of relief  ''Whew'' just then the door slams open ''WHAT IS GOING ON HERE!'' scorched Mr Skits ''oh oh.''   

                                      my improved story

Come in and you'll see the trees standing like an entrance to a castle. Listen to the branch prisoners rattling their chain,the birds zoom across the sky like shooting stars, you,ll say the forest is a dream land. The grass is like bright green glitter leading the way and it's all wrapped up with a calm cold wind filling you with happiness.

written by ANDREW DAVEY  edited by TEACHER.